Activity XI CHOOSE THE BEST. Choose the best revision for each thesis statement. Choosethe letter of the correct answer.
Example:
1. The Raven is a dark and morose poem that leaves the audience feeling depressed by the last stanza. Poe succeeds in creating that effect in “The Raven” through use of repetition and adds to it through contrast of religious Christian and Greek mythological references.
A) E.A. Poe uses repetition and contrasting religious symbolism to create the dark and morose feeling of “The Raven.” [Revision #1]
B) Through the use of droning alliteration and assonance, Poe creates a dark and morose feeling in “The Raven”; Poe enhances this feeling by employing both Christian and Greek religious symbolism. [Revision #2]
C) E.A. Poe’s “The Raven” conveys dark, morose, and depressing feelings because of the repetition of sounds and the contrasting Christian and Greek symbols of death and the afterlife. [Revision #3]
B is the correct revision to this thesis statement. This is because the revision includes both a claim and evidence clause, and uses more precise language to describe the claim than any other choice.)
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1. Alexander Hamilton appeals to the logic of the Americans reading this text.
A) Alexander Hamilton appeals to the logic of his audience by relying on wellchosen diction and syntax. [Revision #1]
B) By employing well-chosen diction and syntax, Alexander Hamilton appeals to his audience’s sense of logic. [Revision #2]
C) In “The Federalist #1,” Alexander Hamilton appeals to his audience’s sense of logic through his use of powerful diction and clear syntax. [Revision #3]
2. While describing her feelings for her husband in this poem, Anne Bradstreet uses many symbols to get her point of the love for her husband across to the reader.
A) In “To My Dear and Loving Husband,” Anne Bradstreet uses several symbols, including “gold” and “rivers,” to convey her feelings of love. [Revision #1]
B) Anne Bradstreet invokes her feelings of love in “To My Dear and Loving Husband” because of her effective use of symbols, including “gold” and “rivers.” [Revision #2]
C) In the poem “To My Dear and Loving Husband,” Anne Bradstreet accomplishes her main goal of expressing her love for her husband by effectively using the symbols of “gold” and “rivers.” [Revision #3]
